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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

This was another very interesting chapter. I liked how this started with introducing Draco and giving him some backstory. It was a nice way to acquaint him with the readers. I also like how seems to be the 'nice guy' now yet he hasn't lost his attitude, as was evident in his interrogation with Anaxandra.

I liked Anaxandra's personality here as well. Though we couldn't get to know much of her, she seemed like a fiery person, someone careful, and yet scared, and I liked how you managed to show this glimpse of her character through the interrogation. It was interesting news that she belonged to a family of hunters.

I enjoyed how information is slowly being revealed bit by bit. It keeps the suspense and the story going as well. I am very much intrigued with her backstory and the main plot now.

The chapter flowed nicely, and the descriptions were simple and clear. The characterisations of Draco and Anaxandra seem interesting so far and I am curious to see how you develop them. The pace of the story looks good too, not too fast and not too slow. The grammar and all is also fine.

All in all, this was a good chapter and has definitely set the scene for the rest of the story. I hope the upcoming chapters are a little more detailed though, as vagueness can quickly bore a reader. So far, the snippety details have worked since it's the beginning of the story, but as it progresses, I hope the pace picks up, the events are more elaborate, and contexts detailed. That's my only suggestion for you.

Otherwise, great job! Keep writing =)

8/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Yeah, I have a terrible time with certain detail and trying to fit the needs of all type of readers as well. Sorry that my detail hasn't been enough, or if my story is boring. I know how hard it is to review a story you just can't keep focused on.

Anyways, I'll do some editing and tweaking. Thank you for the helpful review!


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