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Review:StellaRose says:
Hello! It's Emmy with your review! I took notes for each chapter so I'll go in order.

First off, I'm glad to see that you stayed away from some of the over used 'fanfictoms'. I love that Dom takes after her father with the red hair AND that she's with Teddy. I like how you included the flashback in chapter three to support that too.

The first chapter blew my mind! You had great imagery right off the bat and it was full of suspense. My heart was beating so fast and I literally gasped out loud when she was bitten. SO not expecting that!

The one thing that threw me off was your mention of the wolfsbane potion. When Dom spoke of it she claimed that it didn't stop them from being monsters. From what I remember from the third HP book and what I looked up on HP Wiki, the potion would make the werewolf docile. They would still turn but they would have their human senses and most of them just sleep.

Now there are a few ways that you could switch this up in your story to help the believability factor. It is extremely hard to make so perhaps it was created incorrectly? OR maybe the werewolves lied about taking the potion and bit her intentionally. You also could just have Dom say that it's an extremely tricky potion to get right and that if brewed correctly it could cause death (which it could).

The overall reactions to Dom being a werewolf were spot on. Teddy seems a bit naive to me which is why I think Dom is so upset with him. He has totally and completely accepted that his father was a werewolf but hasn't really thought about what it meant. You have some great character dynamics going on!

Ms. Jones...for some reason I just don't like her at all. I feel like she has a hidden agenda and is shady. Am I right? lol.

Ch. 3 was really heart wrenching when Dom is still coming to terms with her new self. I like how you took the time to really have your character explore everything. Like when she examined the bite mark on her neck and went on about how she felt tainted and she was worried about her soul becoming tainted. I think that was really powerful and as a reader it made me look at everything from a different perspective.

Final thought since this is longer than expected--you are the Queen at cliff hangers. GAH! All I could think of at the end of Ch. 3 is 'by golly she's done it again!' :)

Great job with the story so far and keep up the great work! Feel free to request again!

--Emmy

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked how I've characterised Dom. I tried my best to stay away from the usual fanfiction cliches so yeah xD It's good to know you liked the flashback as well.

It's awesome to hear that you enjoyed the first chapter with the imagery and the suspense and all. I am pleased it had the right effect.

Well, actually Dom is not very well informed herself thus she made that comment. As to why the werewolf bit her etc. will be revealed later. I will edit that part though and try to make it sound like Dom doesn't know it properly herself =)

I am glad you liked Dom's reactions, and my character dynamics. Yeah Teddy is a bit naive, true.

Haha Ms. Jones is not a very likeable character. You'll be definitely seeing more of her soon!

I was worried that chapter three would be considered too slow as nothing much happens but you've put my worries to ease by saying you liked how I explored everything and such with Dom. The bite mark scene is my favourite so I am happy you found it powerful.

Haha I do like cliff hangers xP I am pleased you are liking the story, have re-requested!


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