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Review:Lululuna says:
Hi! :) It's me, finally here with the review you requested... forever ago. I'm so sorry for this long delay, all I can say is that real life snuck up on me, but I really enjoyed this story and hopefully this review makes up for the long delay, at least a little! :)

I love how you chose to write about Peter and give him a bit of a voice, and even some redemption. I think he's such an interesting character to read about and you definitely did him justice, holding on to some details that we know about him from canon: like that he's a scavenger, easily swayed and threatened, and weak. However, I quite enjoyed the guilt, remorse and self-hate you added to his character: it was very fresh, but also fit well into canon. Good and evil isn't always clear, after all, and I feel quite sorry for Peter in this story, while still wishing he hadn't betrayed his friends like he did and that he could have been strong enough to resist.

I thought the rationale for why Peter would first decide to be a spy made a lot of sense, especially with what we know about his personality. His lack of self-worth and need to be protected definitely came across and justified, in a way, his conceding to Voldemort. I found it interesting how instead of thinking that the other members of the Order would have resisted and given up everything to protect their friends, he assumed that they were as weak as he was and would cave under pressure. He had such a horrible kind of half-life after these events, yet would have probably been killed since he wasn't strong enough to fool Voldy, so it is a very complicated choice to make, and he cannot entirely be blamed.

I thought Peter's rationale about becoming the secret keeper was so interesting and dynamic as well, like how he thought that somebody would die anyway. It made me wonder why he thought it better that Lily and James die than Sirius- though I guess the former makes Peter look better to Voldy- and if by this point Peter's soul is decayed enough that he doesn't care about being responsible for choosing who lives or dies. The idea of thinking that it was Sirius' fault and comforting himself in this way fit quite nicely as well.

The one thing which stood out to me as a little confusing is how Peter first got initiated into the DE, since I can't imagine James and Lily and his other friends letting him starve. But then again, it does demonstrate the desperation of the times that even a member of the Order of the Phoenix would be short on basic needs. :)

You had a few really powerful lines in this piece: for example, the last line really summed up Peter's personality so nicely and made me feel quite sad for him, especially knowing they won't get away and he'll be haunted by this guilt for the rest of his quite miserable life. The line about "masquerading as the person he used to be" was very strong as well, and showed that Peter still recognizes and mourns his own corruption.

I also like the symbolism of the title, "Haunted." It made me think how not only will Peter be haunted by his decision to betray his friends, but that he is also haunted by his formal self and even by Voldemort, or the person Voldy moulds him into. Peter's is a very tragic story in it's individual way, and I'm very impressed at how well you pulled it together and gave him voice. Great work! :)

Author's Response: No worries about taking a long time! I understand people have real lives outside of the internet :D

I'm really glad you thought the story fit into canon. And that you felt sorry for Peter, actually - that was sort of my goal! Especially considering how dislikeable he is, and the fact that what he did really can't be justified - I wanted to show how different things were from his perspective.

You're right about why he let Lily and James die. He still wanted the power Voldemort would give him if he gave away their location, even though he hates himself for it.

As for him getting fired - I figured Peter just wouldn't tell his friends that he'd lost his job/didn't have any money. He didn't want to appear weak to his friends and wanted to seem like he was still holding it together. Maybe I should go back and add that in though, to avoid confusion! Thanks for pointing it out.

Thank you for your insightful and kind review, I really appreciate it. You are a wonderful reviewer! :)


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