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Review:patronus_charm says:
Having read the first sentence I decided that this would have to be a rolling review otherwise I might be unable to write anything. I mean, I'm already dying because, a. This is a James centric chapter and b. Happens to take place on the night he's meant to die.

The opening description was soul-crushing! This line 'There was a sort of lightness to his insides borne of excitement and satisfaction,' and all the happy thought about family traditions and happy times! I think I just wanted to cry reading them.

No the war memorial! I don't even want to think about what that turns into later on!

The conversation James had with the children was so sweet. Your James was my favourite out of all the ones I've ever read and gah I just don't want to think about this happening. Maybe Departed Souls can become canon just without the ending ;)

All the preluding (I think I just made a new verb) to the death scene was really well written. The emphasis on the locks, it being them three and James' nerves made complete sense. I guess they almost knew that their deaths were inevitable so that scene worked really well.

The talk about Beth and whether it was successful or not made me feel a little bittersweet that perhaps if it hadn't have happened they would have had the cloak and lived. Your stories have a habit of doing that to me and I really enjoy being made to think so yay for that!

When Harry spoke = intense feel time ♥

Even though James's thoughts weren't the best pre-death thoughts I really liked them. I liked the fact he was angry, annoyed and agitated (and yes, I did chose a adjectives on purpose :P) as it made it real. Their situation wasn't normal with their age and the fact you dwelt on it was really fantastic.

I'm glad that you gave them one last happy scene with Lily telling James the news. Harry was just adorable and James was finally happy. Then the way you tied it in with the colourful smoke was great!

The last line really gave me the chills. The change in narration, the combination of canon and your own interpretation and excellent characterisation really made it great. I'm just sitting here in a blubbering mess, but it was an excellent chapter. ♥

-Kiana

Author's Response: I've been avoiding answering this review all day because I've felt so guilty for stabbing everyone in the feels with this chapter, but seeing as tomorrow's Sunday I really need to get myself under control. *deep breaths and a few yoga poses*

I wrote a one-shot nearly three years ago (wow, that's depressing) called "Extinguished," dealing with James and Lily's deaths, and even though a lot of elements from that story crossed over into here, I tried to make this even lighter and more Halloween-y just to preclude the inevitable. This chapter probably was only as long as it was because I was so scared to write the end. I knew all along that it was coming, from the very beginning of ITB, but I never anticipated getting so close to James. I still don't really think of him as gone, you know?

I've always wondered what would have happened, both in canon and outside of it, what would have happened if James and Lily had had the Cloak that night. Would it have successfully hidden them? Voldemort's got some powerful Dark magic, to be sure, but would the Cloak have trumped that? I guess we'll never find out.

But at least James knew Lily was pregnant! (Random headcanon: I'm pretty sure it was another boy. ♥) And yeah, James didn't have the best pre-death thoughts, but I'd assume that's life. It doesn't always work out the way we'd like it to, movie-perfect, and that's the sort of realism I strive to write into my stories, even if it gets a bit... mopey.

You're the best. :) I'm sort of a blubbering mess myself now, but that's neither here nor there. Thank you very much for your review!!


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