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Review:academica says:
Hello again - here from Review Tag this time!

Well, this is definitely a captivating prologue. I like your set-up of a homeless girl living in New York City. It will be interesting to see why Professor McGonagall has come to take her away. I get the sense from your opening quote that this girl is destined to be quite powerful, perhaps after she learns how to control her magic--assuming she's secretly magical, of course.

I really liked your description during this opening chapter, too. It felt very moment-by-moment and did a good job of making me recall what it feels like to be hungry (I mean, not as hungry as this girl, but still) and to be stuck out getting soaked in the rain. You did a great job of balancing setting the scene with also keeping the pace going strong.

Nice start!

-Amanda

Author's Response: Oh, cool! Thanks! This review tag thing is fun!

I'm very glad it caught your attention and pulled you in. I was trying really hard to do that, without giving too much away. I know I'm walking on the edge of cliches here, girl from America, but I hope I can pull it off.

You are the first person to comment on the quote and the possibilities of her powers. She is quite powerful, and she does have much to learn about magic, as you have pointed out, but very much not in the "save the world" kind of way of Harry. Does that make any sense?

Thanks for your wonderful comments! Helped very much and I loved reading them.

- Farmgirl


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