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Review:APerkins says:
Oh I wish I had read this a week or so ago, I really would have loved to nominate some of these lines as best quotes for the Dobby's. You really have a gift with crafting such delectable phrases.

Did you have a beta on this chapter? I think you called the Potter kids the Wotter kids and there is a grammar change in the sentence "I conveniently overlook(ed) that the leaf came from a poison ivy plant and tried (try) to .."

Mind you, you may have actually been referring to Wotter kids, which would make me both laugh and cringe in embarrassment.

Not 100% sure what to make of Ben, there isn't much to him yet. Loved the way you introduced him with a Tardis pencil case. Just didn't get much about who he was from the ensuing dialogue - he was teasing and fun, but then too tired and disinterested to actually discuss stuff with his friend. Maybe she philosophises way too often? Wasnt sure what to make of it really.

Anyway, I think I wrote in the last review or the one before that I felt there may be a shortage of descriptiveness in the story? take it back. in this chapter even that is done really really well. Well done, update son!

Author's Response: Three chapters reviewed in a row? Wow! And thank you so much for the compliment! *blushes*

I don't actually have a beta for this story at all, but I have issues with tenses, sometimes. And Wotter is a blending of Weasley-Potter. Perhaps I should mention that somewhere...

Ben is developed more later. His introduction here was incredibly brief. Ellie does philophosise too often!

*dies of compliment overload* Thank you so much!


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