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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi again! It looks like I have a lot of chapters to catch up with on this story!

Your writing definitely seems to be improving with each chapter of this. I really like the way that the plot of this story is developing, and I think the idea is really interesting. There are still some problems with dialogue tags and typos, but I don't want to fill each review with comments about that. I would recommend getting a beta to clear those problems up and make this story easier to read. It's easy to do over on the forums; if you make an account and want some help finding your way around then feel free to shoot me a PM there and I'll be happy to help.

I hadn't realised that the plot being the attack at the Quidditch match was so big - since it's not just limited to Britain there has obviously been a lot of thought and planning going into whatever is happening. I'm really curious about who's behind it all - are Lestrange and Selwyn the ringleaders, or are they only heading the British branch of the operation? But the plot is definitely thickening. Events are escalating so quickly and I find myself constantly worrying about what's going to happen next.

One thing that I think you capture really well in this story is the relationship between Harry and Ginny. There's a level of understanding between them even though we haven't seen much of Ginny in this story. I would like to see more of the two together, perhaps to add another subplot to the story, even if it's just for some lighter moments. I know that Harry's working constantly, but maybe if Ginny could nag him a bit about family events, or meeting Ron and Hermione, that would be nice to see. Kreacher was really cute, too. I liked the voice that you gave him in this; it seemed consistent with his canon character.

I was glad to see the reminder in the dream that Lucius Malfoy had been kidnapped, because I'd actually temporarily forgotten about that with everything else that's been going on in the story. I think he must have been kidnapped by the new Death Eaters, but I'm not sure now that you've opened up some more possibilities with other people fighting too.

I like your descriptions in this story as well! The way that you thread them into the story is really nice, and a couple of similes and a bit more imagery would enhance that aspect of your writing even more.

The ending was really interesting. I hadn't expected Grindelwald supporters to be involved, and I wondered whether the people wearing 'his sign' were actually his supporters or if they were searching for the Deathly Hallows. Harry's point about the fact they should be enemies is a good one, although I suppose if Grindelwald's supporters don't actually know that Voldemort killed him, they wouldn't be as reluctant to unite forces.

I'm curious to see what will be happening next!

Sian :)

Author's Response: haha thanks again!
I'm really glad you're enjoying it and I can't wait to hear your reactions on just how big things are getting.

I won't give too much away but Ginny is featured a little more frequently in the later chapters and there is a family meeting scene up in one of them.

And yes, Lucius was captured by Selwyn's recruits in the first chapter to prove to Rabastan of their talents.

The reason the Grindelwald followers wear the sign is because they believe it is 'his' symbol. I doubt many people in the Wizarding world make the link between the sign and the Hallows because not only are there very few who actually believe in the Hallows but they connect that sign with Grindelwald and what he did. Like us and the Nazi symbol. Even when we look at the symbol Hitler stole it from, it just reminds us of Hitler and his Nazis.

Thank you so much for these reviews. I really do appreciate them.

Thanks again
Ben :)


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