I'm, here for your review from my challenge!
I think this is a very interesting start, and I love reading fics where adults are the main characters, even though I do write from teenage perspectives a lot. I'm not so sure where Tonks is going to turn bad, but I will definitely read and review every chapter up until the deadline of my challenge. It's hard for me to judge, as Tonks isn't evil yet so I hope you get more chapters in by the deadline so you can have a chance to win! I think you definitely have a contender here with your writing ability and plot.
I noticed a few mistakes, like annd and sge, but they're very minuscule and didn't take away from the story. I like your characterization of Andromeda the most, I think. I'm a big advocate for interesting characters, because I completely and full-heartedly think that they make a story. I love how she is still very strict. Some people forget who she grew up with, and make her very sweet and easy-going. I like that you thought about her a lot. Even if you didn't, it looks like you did, and I thoroughly enjoyed her part in this.
Thank you for writing such a beautiful piece, and if you would PM me to let me know when the second chapter is up, then I would be very grateful. If you forget, don't worry, I'll check your entry the day the challenge has ended.
Good luck to you and your story!
Author's Response: Heya! Glad to have you by :)
Writing from a teenager's POV is somewhat difficult for me because as far as I remember, I never had mood swings, whims, I never fell in love very often, arguing with my parents because I wasn't happy about something they made me do, so I can't directly relate to that. I'd have to research it a bit haha. I know that sounds weird but I remember myself as being responsible, being friendly to everyone, never talking out of turn, etc.
I am very excited about this idea and I don't want to rush it. I want to take it slow, gradually, so that Tonks's change makes sense and comes naturally. I don't mind if you exclude me from your finalists, because I'm almost sure I won't have Tonks switch sides until the deadline of your challenge :( I hope however, that that won't stop you from coming back and reading this story because it was mostly thanks to you that I had the idea ;)
I haven't read many Andromeda stories so I can assure you that I have no idea how she is portrayed by other authors. However, I imagined that even if Andromeda fell in love with a Muggle-born and ran away from home with him, and generally seems a more genuine, likeable person, it's impossible to wipe out her childhood and the way she was raised. Something HAD to remain ingrained in her personality. This is how I imagine her: strict bur fair, loveable but not overly sweet and a perfectionist, which will lead to interesting character interactions between herself and Tonks later on. You'll see ;)
Thank you so very much for reading and reviewing. I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed my first chapter :D