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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! AditiDraco95 here from the forums for your requested review.

This was certainly a very well-written prologue. I liked your descriptions, they were elaborate and had good imagery, yet not overdone. The emotions came through the narrative nicely too, as I could connect with the girl easily and feel what she was going through.

The way you introduced your main character was interesting. It gave us an idea of what she is like and what conditions she is in without going into too much detail which was perfect for a prologue. The ending scene was also written well with the old woman coming towards her, and the girl knowing what a wand is etc. It all made me intrigued to read more which is very good.

All in all, your main character appears to be quite likeable, and she's definitely someone I'd want to keep reading about. The plot itself is interesting and from your A/N I could tell you've put in a lot of effort in this, so it definitely seems like something worth reading.

A simple suggestion - Since this was a prologue, not much detail was needed. However, for upcoming chapters, make sure you have more details on the surroundings, the situation, the context, and the people.

All in all, this flowed well, no grammar errors, and pretty interesting to read. It was definitely a good start to a story and I look forward to reading more so feel free to re-request.


Author's Response: Thank you so much! You are quick!

Whew! So glad the prologue worked. They can be so tricky. To get enough in there to grab people's attention, but not dump an overload of information on them as well. And I know I was relying a lot on emotion and imagery instead of actual fact, so knowing you connected with the character helps, too.

Intrigued to read more IS good! Cool! Thanks! Feedback like this really helps me to know what's working and what isn't.

I will make sure to keep an eye on my details for the upcoming chapters. I am working really hard to try and balance the giving of information needed to tell the story and set the scenes with the need to hold some stuff back for later revelations. I'll have to ask you how you think I'm doing if I re-request.

Thank you so much! Your review was very helpful! I really appreciate those of you who share your time to read and review like this. I know how much time it does take.

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