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Review:potterfan310 says:
Hello,

I stumbled across this story earlier on this morning and here I am to review!

Okay, first of all I love next-gen, two I love Teddy/Victoire and three I love reading teen pregnancy (I'm weird :p) so I;'m pretty sure I'm gonna love this!

I really like your Victoire as a character, and what you said about her bouncing her knees when nervous, really adds to her character and makes her seem real.

I like that instead of it being a flashback to that night Victoire and Teddy did the deed, it's Victoire telling the story rather than seeing it from her POV.

"If I am unable to back out of a pregnancy then he should be too." - I really like this sentence and just like Victoire I believe than guys shouldn't be able to back out and forget about it whilst the lady has to go through with it.

I'm intrigued about Dom and Louis' ages. It might be an idea to say my '13 year old sister Dom won't care and my 6 year old brother Louis would probably ask where babies come from.' (I have no idea how old they are in your story so feel free to change them or just ignore this idea).

I'm a bit confused if Vic had to wee on the stick, like a muggle why did she then have to tap it with her wand? Unless I've missed something and she actually has two tests?

CC - Nothing major, just the the large gap between the very first paragraph and the second.

- A few small grammar mistakes such as a missing comma

- I don't think she would call her mum 'mumsie' as Fleur is French I'd probably say more than likely she'd call her maman.

I really like this story so far and this is a good start!

Off to read chapter 2 now!

10/10
-Potterfan310
Soph :)

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