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Review:Courtney Dark says:
I AM SO, SO, SO, SO EXCITED! I'd add on about a thousand more so's, but that would probably be a waste of letters. And now I've got myself wondering how many so's you could actually fit in a review...

NEVER MIND THAT COURTNEY! ONTO THE CHAPTER!

This is not going to be a coherent, understandable, interesting or intellectual review because all I want to do is jump up and down, clap my hands and do this excited dance that I do when I run up the stairs, dance around the lounge with a big smile on my face and run back down. I CAN'T WAIT TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

Okay, so I love the title and the summary and this first chapter - I can already tell that it is going to be a lot darker than the first book, which I am actually really excited about I just know that there are going to be so many warm, I WANT TO HUG ALL THE CHARACTERS moments as well. And also amazing moments from your amazing villain's point of view. I also can't wait to see how you write about all the upcoming events, non-canon and canon - I already know I will be impressed!

I loved Sirius in this chapter because I loved seeing this darker side of him, which we all know he has. It was really, really interesting and I am looking forward to seeing how his character, and all the others, continues to develop. I can definitely imagine him as the sort of person who turns to alcohol and becomes reckless as a way of dealing with grief.

Also, Bellatrix's POV was amazing, as usual - what I particularly liked about this section is the fact that we got to see a glimpse of Voldemort in action and we also got see a little of Bellatrix's perspective of Snape - while I was reading this chapter, I suddenly remembered how mistrustful Bellatrix was of him in HBP.

I have to admit, I very almost started crying every time Belle was mentioned - I'm definitely going to miss her in this story and obviously the characters will do - my heart is still breaking for Sirius and Lily, especially. Sirius is really not good at dealing with grief, though hopefully the wedding will be a bright spot on a very dim horizon.

I really loved the line: “Mummy, daddy, if you two are done fighting about me...” It was nice to have a bit of humour in amongst all the sadness.

Amazing, perfect first chapter! I cannot wait for more - I can't say that enough times! And sorry for all the gushing, haha - your writing just brings out the mushy side of me!

Wow, this was an extremely rambly, repetitive review!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi Courtney!!!

I am SO excited that you like how this started! I hope you saw my post on the forums about why I didn't update last Saturday, but I promise updates will go back to normal this coming Saturday!

This is definitely going to be darker than Before They Fall, but I also think there will be more intense emotional moments in a good way. If that makes sense :P! Ahh i hope you're impressed and that you end up liking this as much as Before They Fall!

Sirius was a lot of fun for me to write in this chapter! I think because, like you said, it was a chance to really show a glimpse into the more chaotic, darker side of him. Our poor Sirius :(

I get super sad when I realize I can't include Belle in any of these scenes :(. I mean, I realized that when she was gone, she'd be gone, but I didn't think about how bad it would feel to not be able to include her, you know? haha, I'm probably sounding like a crazy person.

Thank you for this amazing review, Courntey! I'm so happy that you're still enjoying my Marauders, and really hope you'll like this book as much as the first ♥

Jami


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