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Review:Haronione says:
Hiya, I'm back for chapter 2 :)

So, I liked the start of this and the fact that you made at least one of the group unsure about what Dumbledore was asking them to join in to. While someone like Sirius would jump at the chance of physically fighting against Voldemort and his cause, I feel that it is realistic that there would be some of the group who would be unsure and scared. I also like how you have made it Mary to be the one who questions what they are being asked to do, and your reasoning for this. She is a bit of an outsider in this group and so doesn't have the bonds or the support (or at least she may feel that she doesn't) that the others do, and so it fits that she would have reservesations about the situation. I wonder what role she will play in this fic now that she has not joined the order - and whether something will happen to make her eventually join.

I also liked the Graduation ceremony scene and Lily's speech (although I'm not entirely sure what a commencement ceremony is - is it another name for graduation? Probably made myself look rather silly for asking that!) How true was Lily's speech though! It truly is the beginning for them, they are about to enter the 'real world' now and Merlin is it going to be different! I wonder if they all knew just how different life would be after that point.

I absolutely loved the idea that they would be leaving Hogwarts the way they entered it - via the boats. That would really round off their time at Hogwarts and make that last journey away from Hogwarts almost as special as the first journey into it! It is a shame we never saw the trio graduate, but I guess that would just not have fitted in to the story.

I sense a bit of a love triangle coming on between Sirius, Dorcus, Remus and Marlene (would that be a triangle if there are four of them?!). I look forward to seeing how that plays out and whether Marlene ever voices her feelings for Sirius. I have a feeling this could play havoc with the dynamics of the group!

Ooh, the ending is very intriguing! I'm left wondering who the girl is. My thoughts are Dorcus or Marlene - guess I'll have to wait to find out!

Sorry about my rambling in this review!

Haronione ♥

Author's Response: Wow thank you! This is really amazing. I always thought that it would be too easy if everyone automatically wanted to join the Order. Mary is still an important character, and you'll see that later.

I loved writing this! In America, it's just another name for a graduation. I tried to sneak that in by Lily mentioning her sisters graduation, but I guess it's not the same in the UK. I love graduations!

Maybe a bit of a love square.I don't know, she said conspicuously. Heehee, sorry I won't give anything away yet.

Thank you so much for your review, it was very nice and I'm glad you're enjoying it. It's great for me to hear your thoughts.


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