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Review:MC_HK says:

The beginning to the story is good, and I like where you are taking this. It's funny to see an American at Hogwarts and being confused by the slang. You gave your characters good personality, and they are fun to read.

I would say that it would flow very nicely if the minor spelling and grammar mistakes could be addressed. There is an instance where you use "adobe" instead of "abode", and you have "out" instead of "our". I am quite confused with the whole Fred and Perri situation in the kitchens, though. I understand it was supposed to be kind of playful, but I didn't really understand what was going on. And for me, the relationship between him and Perri seemed very rushed, like they got too comfortable too quickly. That's just my opinion, though.

Overall, you've got a good start here. Interested in reading more, MC_HK

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'll be sure to take care of the spelling and grammar issues! Ah! I don't want anyone to be confused by that part...I'll fix it! This has been extremely helpful! Thank you very much! xx

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