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Review:soufflegirl99 says:
Hi Sian! I couldn't resist leaving a review on such an awesome one shot, even if it did take me descades to get here!

This is such a beautiful piece of writing, I felt like every word was carefully picked out to suit this piece, and it all fitted together amazingly well. The characterisation of them was spot on, and I loved the relationship described between Teddy and Victoire.

I loved the nod at the greek gods; as if this was godly beauty, and no other human can compare, and she is untouchable. The mtnion of colours really stuck out in this, and the 'indigo eyes' was really clever, because purple is often interpreted as royal and moody, and dark blue is mysterious and wild like the sea and sky, so the combination of those two colours together gave us an insight in to what was going on in their head and suited what I said earlier about being untouched and more like nature's gift. "My unworthy eyes feast greedily," also refers to this theme, and reminded me of Midas and gold; also with the whole indigo and royalty. The theme was just really well played out through out the one shot, and I loved looking deeper in to the meaning of each word. "Granite heart" was my favourite in all of this! :)

The way Teddy speaks in italics, it combines the 3rd and first person, and that's what makes this piece so original! Especially the last two lines, they kind of contrast with each other, and they're both set out the same, and gah, it's just so awesome.

The conflicting emotions are well described, and there's a kind of soothing rhythm to the words and the lines you set out, though I don't think that's deliberate! I feel so sorry for Teddy, as in he'll never get to be with Victoire, and I love the way that's finally revealed in the last bit.

All in all, a perfectly sculptured image of beauty, and what it really means. It's definitely very thoughtful, and memorable, and it's awesome!

-Sophie :D

Author's Response: Sophie! You're amazing, do you know that? *hugs*

Since this was for the Every Word Counts challenge, I did find myself picking out each word to fulfill a specific purpose, and I'm so pleased that it worked and that you were able to get so much from this story!

I actually really wanted to include the Greek gods in this because of the mythical inspiration behind the story but I didn't want it to seem too forced. The fact that you were able to pick up on that and make connections with other myths makes me so happy, because it means I'm doing my job! I love the fact you've been able to pick up on the colours that I included as well, and interpret one word in so many different ways!

Teddy is the echo here, and I thought the italics worked really well to show that. You're the first person to pick up on those last two lines, and that's put a massive grin all over my face. I really wanted them to seem contrasting and portray the conflicting emotions of the two characters, and it's great you managed to get all of that from this story!

Thank you so, so much for this wonderful review, my dear! ♥

Sian :D

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