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Review:MC_HK says:
Hello!

To address your concerns, I do believe you've got a well paced chapter here. The pieces (since this is the only chapter I read, I can only assume) seem to fall into place quite well, and it leaves enough mystery for your reader to want to come back to read more. The plot is well done, and I ask questions enough that I want to keep reading to find out more.

I did find a few tense, spelling, and grammar issues though. Nothing that a quick beta can't fix, but I am especially confused by this sentence:

"None of her cousins nor her brother ever bothered to be dig more about that night, but Rose knew there were more to it. "

I don't quite understand what that first bit was supposed to say, but it should be "...Rose knew there was more to it." I think if you want to make this flow a bit better, and make it easier for the reader, those should be fixed. I also noticed some run-on sentences and repetitive words in there.

Otherwise, I like where this is going! I think this is very interesting, and I am glad that you requested!

MC_HK

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I had really hoped that I wasn't dragging things along for too long in this chapter because I wanted to get the plot going. I will definitely fix those grammar mistakes. Thank you so much for pointing it out! And again, thanks for reading and reviewing! (:

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