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Review:Rebekah says:
To apply with the 12+ guidelines here on HPFF I just 'pooped' bricks.

I apologize in full for it taking me months and months to review your story but you really should re-request it again and again so I am forced to read it all. I think that your characterization is beautiful and the story idea is so fresh (maybe it's not but I haven't read any werwolf fics so it's fresh to me!!)

What I mainly think you should do is draw more focus to the forest in your description at the beginning of the chapter. Elaborate more on what Dom really hates about the cabin not just one incident. Try to make the horror of what is going to happen to her more prevalent in the start of the chapter with your description.

Not really foreshadowing just capturing horror in higher detail. Maybe describe the woods she just exited? I really hope you understand what I'm trying to say because I think it would add just another dimension to the story.

I hope this is what you were looking for, I'll probably be more of use as I read more of the story (I'm adding it to my favorites list because I did enjoy it so much) and please re-request it!! I promise I'll get back to you faster.

Cheers and good luck!

ox,
lemonpeeps

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing. No worries about the delay.

I am pleased you liked my characterisation and story idea.

Thanks for your suggestions. When I edit, I'll keep that in mind. I did understand what you were trying to say =)

I am floored that you added it to your favourites. I have re-requested for the next chapter. Thank you!


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