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Review:handknittedsweaters says:
Hi there! It's lemonpeeps with your review you requested years and years ago. I got super wrapped up in summer and work and then forgetting didn't really help either but I have arrive and I hope I do you justice with this review.

Looking over what other people have said too I agree completely with your ability to dive into the death eaters head and just capture obsessiveness. Props to you!

Like you asked, it does make a great introduction to a short story, I feel tension and anger and grief and feeling emotions are great in writing. Your characterization is very well done I have more on that later in the review

Also you have a very well written beginning that makes the jump in very enjoyable. I really don't have that much critique to give you.

One small thing relating to characterization I really wouldn't have noticed if I hadn't been reading it so closely but did you mean to have Nott grow more human as the chapter progressed because I find that he is. I wouldn't say that that's a bad or a good thing but if he is suppose to then I would try to make that a little more obvious so it doesn't look like a mistake and if it's not its really cool and you should really make it a little more obvious so that it stands out just a little more.

I hope this is what you were looking for!

Good luck

ox,
lemonpeeps

Author's Response: Hello! :) That is perfectly alright, I'm just glad I got to read your amazing review!

I'm glad you thought I did well in diving into his head, and studying the motivations of what makes him an obsessive Death Eater. I'm glad you thought the beginning was strong enough, and that it worked as an introduction to the entire short story collection, even if all the chapters are rather different.

I did want to have him grow more relateable and human, and to kind of blur the lines between good and evil if that makes sense. He has done some horrible things, but he also has some admirable and relateable qualities, which is what I was going for! I'm happy you picked up on that, and will try to figure out a way to make it more prominent!

Thank you so much for taking the time to leave this review, I really appreciate it! :)


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