Hi, Kiana -- here to review you for the TGS review exchange!
People really don't mention Barty Crouch enough in stories, let alone write stories entirely centered around him, and I was pretty intrigued when I saw that your story for this month's exchange dealt with him. The old Ravenclaw collab was a Barty-centric story, so I've read (and written) a bit about him, but I somehow loved the fact that you put it into second person. That's actually one of my favorite writing techniques, and not a lot of people can pull it off; it can sometimes be really challenging. But for a character like Barty, who can seem sometimes incomprehensible, the second person allows the reader into his head to see what he's thinking, and I thought it was a really excellent choice of storytelling!
The last section is my absolute favorite -- bleak and depressing, but wonderful for all that. ♥ It's so heartbreaking, too, because that's where the entire story comes to a close. How painful would it be, to know that your own family was, in the end, what led you to where you ended up? And then there's the idea of Barty's mother's role in canon, too, but obviously that doesn't come into play in this one-shot. I don't really know what I'm trying to say anymore, but there's just such emotion in, what, four lines? I got a little bit teary thinking about it. They were very hard-hitting, and that's what I look for in a story.
Death Eaters all have a reason for ending up where they do. Some are mad, some are power-hungry... And that's the great thing about fan fiction. We're allowed to explore that. Why don't more people explore that? I find it fascinating! And in your story, Barty Crouch Jr.'s father is almost more of the villain for not saving his son. I am nearly incomprehensible with love for that twist.
Wow. This review was a bit... less than desired. But honestly, I loved reading this, and I'm very glad I got the chance to. ♥
Author's Response: Hey Rachel!
I noticed that too, that's why I was really glad when I was given him in the challenge because I really hadn't thought about him at all but now was my chance. Don't bring up the collab it will only trigger guilt of having not read it! I'm really glad that you liked my choice of narrative, as it just somehow seemed to fit him. It was actually a ton of fun to write so I definitely want to try it out again!
The last section is my favourite too! I know how you feel, because I felt I became a lot closer to Barty in this one-shot so I almost wanted to make it AU so he could have happy life away from everything. I'm sorry I made you teary, but I guess it was good teary in a way :P
I'm so glad that you loved the twist, as it's so much fun to explore it from another perspective! Thank you for this wonderful review, Rachel! ♥