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Review:nott theodore says:
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This was such a fun read! There were so many bits that really made me laugh in this story, and I think it worked really well as a parody.

I loved the first paragraph, and the fact that you went through so many descriptions just to say that she is half French and half English. You really played up the fact that Victoire is always portrayed as perfectly beautiful and Teddy as some sort of male model as well; those sorts of things are so common in Teddy/Victoire stories and I thought it was great that you picked up on that and made it into a funny part of this story.

There were other aspects as well which played well on the stereotypes and popular plotlines in fanfiction. The fact that Teddy's hair was changing colour according to his mood when Tonks' hair never did, that Victoire was only one-eighth Veela but was beautiful enough to be fully Veela and have millions of men (and some women as well) falling at her feet. The dig at the couple names was great as well.

The cooking seemed a bit random and so did Teddy's new recipe, but it fits in the context of a parody. I liked the fact that you made the characters very shallow and the day was meant to be a romantic replay of the proposal which ended in Monsieur Delacour choking on the ring. Arthur only talking about Muggles as well - he never does that in the books, but I have seen it happen in fanfiction.

The only CC I have is that I did spot a couple of typos here and there in the story, but I'm sure that you could fix those with another read through.

I loved the ending paragraph as well! Of course Teddy would end up as Minister for Magic and Victoire's crazy ability for saving people from choking would land her a job in St. Mungo's - as well as the two of them ending up having veeery sexy babies!

This was a great read, Adi - I was laughing a lot and I really enjoyed it!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Sian! :) It's always great to hear from you :)

I'm glad you liked the introductory para. If I may be honest, I had the most fun writing the start, the end, and the proposal. But the whole thing was fun, in general. So I'm glad you liked that because I did put in a lot of effort :)

I tried to make fun of all stereotypes that we see in fanfiction about these two (and some stereotypes we see in real life as well, like couple names). I'm happy you liked that! :)

The cooking was meant to be quite random and absurd. I wanted to make it rather outrageously odd, and I think I managed that, gathering from the reviews :) Thanks! :)

I did try to make the characters shallow and a bit out-there. It makes me happy to see that I've manages that, because it is quite important while writing a parody!

Thanks for pointing it out. I'll definitely edit this sometime and correct all those errors :)

HAHA! :) Yes. Of course it had to happen! Who didn't see that coming? ;)

Thank you so much for this review, Sian. You've made me smile throughout :) You're a lovely person!


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