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Review:CambAngst says:
Warm. Fuzzy. Not typically feelings I associate with Professor McGonagall, but at the moment I have to say that I'm brimming over with the warm fuzziness. The glass of beer in front of me has a little to do with it, but only a little. I don't know how I got wrapped up in Sadie's character so quickly. It's not like me to do this. But her story is so mysterious and her circumstances really tug at the old heart strings... the combination really pulled me in.

What I don't think I was quite ready for was Ophelia Oddsocks. You have one heck of a good Harry Potter character there, one well-suited to the first three books when everyone who wasn't in league with Voldemort -- and even some who were -- tended toward the sillier end of the spectrum. I love her quirkiness and all of the little touches you applied to her. She's a brilliant foil for a traumatized youngster like Sadie or an all-business type of woman like McGonagall. I have a feeling that the two of them used to tear it up when they were students at Hogwarts.

You layered a little more onto Sadie's back story in this chapter, and I still think your pacing is really good. Charlie and Jenny... hmnnn... You mentioned earlier that you're taking a bit of liberty with the timeline of the books, but I still doubt that she could be Charlie Weasley's child. Given her read hair and brown eyes, however, I'm wondering if there isn't a Weasley connection here. McLauchlin. Not a well-known wizarding family name. I guess I'm just going to have to wait to find out.

You did a good job with McGonagall. The compassion was obviously there, but she maintained that composure and sense of professional detachment that she's known for. No tearful, huggy-kissy reunions, no matter what past connection she might have had to Sadie.

Once again, your editing was superb. Not a thing wrong with this chapter that I could see. Very nice flow and a good mix of dialog and narrative.

I'm getting really eager to get to more of the meat of Sadie's story. Great job!

Author's Response: Yeah, I'll admit, I let this sit here for a while, basking in the glow of such a great review. And even with the beer helping with the warm fuzzy feeling, I can't help smiling to know that Sadie's story is pulling you in. Hope I can keep it that way, but if it ever stops doing that, don't be afraid to tell me. I won't mind.

Ophelia Oddsocks was a fun character to create. I actually created her backwards, using her for a fic in this series much farther down the line and then realizing how much fun she would be to put here. Pairing her up with McGonagall was a blast. I can see those two tearing it up just like you said. And sometimes, even though I love the angst and the drama of the later Harry Potter novels, I really do miss the fun "magicalness" of the first few.

Pacing is good? WOW! Thanks! I worried a ton about that! And keep that Charlie thought in your head. Not right, but connected. As for the McLauchlin name...I'll admit to choosing a name for the name's sake and ignoring lists of wizarding names. Perhaps I should add that to my list of canon-departures at the beginning.

I have always very much loved McGonagall, but it's only been lately I've dared try to write her much. She very much as a certain mood about her, and you're right, it's hard to do. Feeling much better to know you think it worked here. I wanted to convey her emotions, but not change who she is with them.

I can't claim all responsibility for the editing. I do have a fabulous beta/muse helper who looks over this stuff for me. She catches all my dumb mistakes.

Thank you again so much for this smile-inducing review! Come back in two weeks for more, if you're still interested.


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