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Review:Erised says:
Hi Val! I'm so pleased I've been paired with you for the review exchange because I haven't read anything of yours before and clearly I have been missing out. This is the type of story I love to read on the archive and so of course I adored it!

So firstly, I've just GOT to talk about your style for this chapter and this fic as a whole. It's so perfect for it that I can't really write coherently my praise. Your almost descriptive but snappy style means that as a reader we get little snapshots of each character which give us just enough information about them that's needed before moving on to the next.

You fleshed out all of the characters so well with just a few words and honestly it amazes me how well you did it. I felt that each character had their own separate identity from the others and they were suitably different so that you couldn't be confused by any of them. I also really liked how you've hinted to deeper, darker things for each one happening but haven't gone into detail just yet. It leaves me very intrigued as to what's going to happen next and how it will affect the group dynamic.

As a group they work very well. As I mentioned before their different personalities make them harmonise very well because none of them are too similar, and Johanna's concern for Simon was very touching and well written. I really feel for them because it's such a delicate situation and I also think you wrote his deportation very well as it can often be a sensitive and upsetting subject.

I also enjoyed the more clinical and cold aspect to the story which all of the group have towards life and death. It really made them all much more multi-dimensional as characters and as I reader I really felt for them too, because that's just no way to live. Their lives seem so bleak which you describe perfectly through their actions and your descriptive sentences.

I just cannot get over how perfect this first chapter was! It has got to be one of the best I've ever read. You have done such an amazing job here and I am so so excited to read and review the rest of this.

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