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Review:Lightinthedark52 says:
So, I think after about two weeks of checking daily for a new chapter I should do your story the honour of reviewing it, because it's definitely captured my interest.

I first found and read the story a few weeks back, and can I just say that I love it so far? When I first saw the summary I was captured by the originality, and intrigued although I was a little sceptical as to how you'd pull off the half-dementor thing.

I absoloutely love how you've written the story so far. One of my biggest pet peeves in fanfics is when the muggle world sort of invades the wizarding world a bit too much, or the wizards are a bit too muggle. I guess it's because I'm a big canon lover. I think you've definitely written it as a wizarding world story which is a big plus to me, personally.

The only unrealistic bit is how long they've stayed in London. It seems like a day or two in London would of been enough once the focus was on feeding as opposed to just hanging around together because that's a LOT of school she's missing, especially being that they're both taking NEWT level classes. Even if they're both really smart, I can't see Dumbledore wanting them out of school more than necessary with Voldemort on the rise, or why it's take more than a few days for her to feed.

I really do love this story though, it's excellent, and I'm definitely looking forward to an update. :)

Author's Response: Well first off I must thank you for such a lovely review! I'm very happy that you like the story, but even more thrilled that you're willing to give constructive criticism. :)

I'm sure this is partly on my fault for not being more specific on the changing of times, but they really only have been in London for about 24 hours! They start out coming in the wee hours of the morning then romp around London mostly talking, meeting her mum, getting food, meeting Ivan, etc. and then they go to his party...the next chapter takes place the morning/afternoon after that. I think that it was more implied than outright stated though and I'm sure there were other people who felt the same way. I'll definitely be doing some edits to make this more clear then. Because you are absolutely correct. They wouldn't be just wondering around London for days and days and weeks. And, as will be addressed in a later chapter (16, I think), this is not a normal trip for Elaina.

ANYWHO. You are completely correct and I'm sure this was just my fault as the author, not being able to clearly convey what I already know in my mind. As previously stated, I will be editing this. But I will get the next chapter up very, very soon. As in, the next few days ;)


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