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Review:Mnemosyne_Morrigan says:
Hi! I'm here with your requeste review :) sorry for the delay.

I may have posted that I adore dark and bitter stories, but light and funny ones do not repel me. Especially not this one ;) At first it doesn't appear as one of those feathery, fresh and humorous. Because you managed to skilfully balance tone of sadness with brightnes and vitality. The lightness of the story is perfect - even reading about pain is easier as it's presented as a part of life, which is sinusoidal. You did really good job with the atmosphere.

The stereotypical case of dislike between two main characters (that probably will develop feeling for each other) is a little annoying for me. It's not bad, you can have your own vision for plot. I just read too many stories where it starts like this and it becomes predictable. I do like the flirtatous-sarcastic banter between them, just it's foreseeable. Cliche

Despite that, characters of Ellie, Albus and Chris are interesting. Good written. They're not overdrawn, each has a natural lightness and spark. And that's not easy to do. Yet, your characters gained my symphaty from the very beginning. Particulary Albus. You've put something in him, some sort of curious "James Potter's" flame or a marauder streak, and I'm loving it ;) it's so crisp, but not exaggerated. Most of all, usually it's his brother James Sirius portrayed as a playful egomaniac, so maybe the change of Alubs stereotype works here too.

Your disrespect for stereotypes is awesome! :)

Beside that Albus-Ellie hate-flirt thing, everything else is completely the opposite. Like I mentioned, Albus as a player not a bookworm. And most of all, your Rose. She's not quite the daughter of her mother. We all know what Hermione thought of divination, fortune-telling and visions... and here's Rose, eager to see a mystic. She probably drives her mother crazy! I could also imagine Rose as a bit wicked and snide, in a way where she purposely tells her father she sees a Grim in his tea grind. On the other hand she's so girly, romantic, different from many others portrayals of Rose Weasley in fanfiction. If you keep that up, it's probable I will adore all of your characters.


- Mnemosyne

Author's Response: Oh, don't worry about the delay! I've neglected my review request for up to two months before, so I completely understand.

Gah! You're so nice! I did try to balance the good with the bad, so to speak, because you're right - life's all about the ups and downs, often at the same time. I'm glad that came through.

I know, I know. The relationship dynamic between Ellie and Albus is so cliche it makes me cringe sometimes, but I chose it for a couple of reasons. One is that I do enjoy a good cliche, and another is that it fits well with Ellie's character. It isn't just Albus that she doesn't like - deep down, she doesn't like a lot of people.

:D I wanted to write Albus as more Marauder-like, for sure. I mean, it isn't just James who's a descendant from one! And yeah, Rose's love for Divination is probably partly because it's her little form of rebellion!

Thank you so much for this lovely review!


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