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Review:Illuminate says:
Hi! Review Tag!

This is a good first chapter, and an intriguing idea for a story! It's very interesting to think about what would happen if Harry had a sibling, and I think it's a good idea for giving Jasmine to Sirius. I think your characterisation of Dumbledore is good!

You have a little flow problem in that there are some missing commas and other punctuation issues :) I see from other reviews that you already know this so I hope you succeed in getting a beta soon :) One more thing- just a little Britishism; In Britain we say 'nappies,' not 'diapers,' so the diaper bag would be a nappy bag :)

All in all, good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing and I'm glad you liked the idea for the story. I'm enormously happy that you liked my characterisation of Dumbledore I was worried that no one would like the way I wrote him. I am in the process of searching for a beta and I hope I find one soon to fix the train wreck that is my grammar/punctuation. Thanks so much for the britishism I will definitely make sure I change it from diaper bag to nappy bag. Thanks for the review!

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