Firstly, the whole title and chapter title for this story is completely and utterly awesome and I had no choice but to check it out. It sounded way too fascinating, and I'm pleased I did, because this is such an original and awesome interpretation of Bellatrix and her life.
Bellatrix is such a complex character to portray and write about, so lots of kudos for tackling such a tricky character! I love the way you characterised her of not always being evil and bad -- it makes much more realistic and believable as a character, and it makes a nice change from all the other Bellatrix stories :)
I've never really thought about what happened to the Black family when Andromeda went off with Ted, and I think all the characters acted accordingly. The way you describe Bellatrixs' reactions and her feelings towards her sister seem to all make sense, in comparison to the Bella we know now. When you described; "steaming waves of white, hot rage in her throat" that was beautiful and summed up the feeling of anger perfectly.
It was very, I can't think of another way to say this, but english narrative. It worked amazingly in third person, and the way you went in to such brilliant detail, and the way you described the suitor, how the suitor acted, and everything really reminded me of the way Rowling spoke about Harry and everything, and the combination of great detail, engaging range of sentences, and the way you structured it made it very english and such a riveting story to read! It just makes this chapter so addictive!
I think pride played such a big part in Bella's life -- the way her family treated bloodlines, and the way Bella dealed with people, like the first thing she noticed in a person was their bloodline. And the characterisation from the beginning of the chapter even, you see her thinking all these things but not taking action, compared to what she's like at the end which is even more proud, and acting more wildly. She's come some of the way towards the full death eater Bellatrix already! I love the way Bella analyses things a lot...that's a really inventive thing to make her do, because I'd always imagined her to be quite rash. It kind of makes her even more evil in that case, knowing fully and wanting to kill someone.
There's such much more I want to say about this chapter, but I'm exhausted, so I'm just going to cut it short. This chapter was so original, immense fun to read, and I loved everything about it from the format to the characters (Rudolphus sounds cool!) The last lines were really suspenseful and tense, and I can't wait to see what happens next! :)
Author's Response: I have no words to tell you how much your review means. I am so pleased and humbled that you found the whole narrative appropriate for the situation, especially since I am not English and I've never been to England.
I don't think all people are born evil. I think people are born good and they have evil come into their lives and take over. And for Bellatrix, I think she needed a trigger. Because we have three sisters, brought up the same way. One ran away with a Muggleborn, one married a pureblood and one ... well, one became the poster child for mental illness.
Bellatrix is such a complex character and it was challenging for me to do this. I'm happy the results were good. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! It means a lot! :)