This Rose that you portray in this story is so cool and fun to read! :) It's a really original take on her, and I love Scorpius in this too! I especially love the detail you payed to the quidditch-ness, and the banter between Scorpius and Rose is very well formed, witty and funny!
The narrative of Rose runs so fluently through this story! She's so humourous, and the structure of where you put her thoughts and opinions on things/people was spot on and well spaced out! This really helped it flow, and the way the lines were spaced and stuff made it even more funny! Hahah I liked the comments about her missing breakfast and also about Pippa! :P The way Rose saluted to Madame Hooch was hilarious as well, and I can see the Ron element in her, as well as the studious witty side of Hermione. The metaphor with Hagrid's salamanders was very witty, and it made me laugh loads!
The whole plot of the story is very engaging, and you create this captivating atmosphere right from the start, with these lingering lines that really make you want to read on. You don't get too deep in to the whole revenge thing either, which is awesome, because other wise it would be boring and angsty hahah :P
Pippa's nice, but she seems like the kind of person who could hack you off a bit, so I agree with Rose that she finds her annoying. I can totally empathise with Rose getting annoyed at having Pippa and Albus as a couple too. Scorpius is quite harsh to Rose, at least from her point of view anyway, and so I can see why Rose announced what she did. However, I'm interested to see what Scorpius will do back next chapter.
Altogther, a really funny and addictive story! I love the title, and the plot, and the characterisation and everything is brilliant!
Author's Response: I'm really glad you like her! She was a lot of fun to write -- all of these characters were, actually. My Rose is heavily inspired by a Rose that Sarah once wrote, so I can't take full credit, but she's endlessly entertaining. I've actually got a full sequel short story/novella planned for this story, and if I ever do write any big HPFF thing again, I can see that being it. I actually sort of miss the wackiness that went along with Rose and Scorp and company.
I'd always wanted to do a big Quidditch-focused story, and even if this wasn't a novel, this satisfied that craving pretty well. Writing about Quidditch constantly is hard! That's where the other classroom scenes come in handy -- a nice break from the sports side of things, which, admittedly, isn't my favorite part.
Pippa and Albus are both a little obnoxious -- well, so is Rose, but she's very in-your-face about how annoying she is, and I do have to respect that somewhat. ♥ This is definitely my turn away from my usual angsty, dark writing and it was a great outlet at the time, and another huge reason why I'd like to attempt the sequel. Nearly everything I write is on the darker and angstier side of things in general, and banter/fluff is a good reprieve from that occasionally.
Thank you for reading this and letting me know your thoughts, Sophie! I really am so pleased you enjoyed it so much, and each new review on this story gets me thinking about that sequel more and more. It's something I'm seriously considering!