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Review:Lady of Tears says:
I'm here with your requested review!

My my, what a sweet story! I really enjoyed what you did here. :) It put a smile on my face, and was just refreshing.

The things that I enjoyed most were the dialogue and overall plot. It flowed nicely, there was good interaction between the characters, and it was something with a little sparkle.

I did want to know, why Malaysia?

Which brings me to the biggest detractor for me: we weren't in someone's head exclusively. While there were benefits to seeing both Dominique and Teddy's perspectives, it also made things more general. I think if you'd stuck inside one of the other, you could have really delved into what they were experiencing. When I do that, it really helps my ability to describe things.

Also, I just had a question about the magic. You can't transfigure food, so I wanted a bit more about if he'd set it up or not. But that's a really nit-picky detail. :)

I thought, overall, this was a fun and well-written piece. Everything about it was very real and lovely! Thanks for requesting!

-Lady of Tears

Author's Response: hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you found this sweet and enjoyed it, and that it was refreshing for you.

I am not very good at dialogue so it's such a relief to hear that you enjoyed it along with the overall plot. A little sparkle? I like that, haha. Thanks.

Well, Malaysia is where I am currently staying and I have been to a similar island so I picked that place xP

Yeah I am not very good at writing first person, and I wanted to show both sides of the story, thus chose to write it this way, making it more general. I prefer it this way, though I'd definitely take your comments into consideration when I do an edit and see if delving into Dom's head (or Teddy's) exclusively can work for me.

Oh right, I didn't have him conjure it, I wanted him to have already kept it in a basket or something on the island and just set it up with magic at the right moment. Perhaps, I'll include the small details about that when I edit. Thanks for the suggestions.

I am pleased you liked this overall, thanks.

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