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Review:ChaosWednesday says:

Yeah, wow, long one-shot! But I can tell you enjoyed writing it because I enjoyed reading it!

One doesn't often come by a one-shot about the marauders that feels fresh and new, since we know every little thing by now. And yet, you managed to - subtly, with little to no melodrama - bring these characers to life again and make me care about what they are going through. That is a feat, as I tend to avoid any story with Lily and James and Sirius in it.

Something about the down-to-earth, realistic presentation of Severus and Peter's struggles really interested me. Usually, montages like this tend to get rather dramatic, as we know all characters are doomed. But you managed to focus on the immediacy of their choices, with hardly any judgement and without the romanticization. They still believe their fate isn't sealed quite yet, and your descriptions give the reader hope as well. Does that make sense?

So, in combination with the cold, down-to-earth descritptions, I enjoyed the fun little theme of mobility between "good" and "bad" that you had connecting the two stories. And it was nteresting how an unrequited love for Lily, depending on the purity of the love and character, can either push a man to be a better version of himself or a worse one. It was a nice way to tie things together, without going the way of metaphors or drama. Basically, a really wonderful story, glad I clicked on it. Cheers!

Author's Response: Hah, I'm glad that came across!

It's great to hear that this story felt refreshing, because I thought it was sort of an original plot line and it also revived my interest in the Marauders (which I thought I had ended for a while with the completion of my novel).

I'm big on details, and this story was no exception. I think you're right that I tried to seize that moment before everyone knew the truth about Harry's survival and Voldemort's demise into a creature less than human. It was neat to imagine the Death Eaters celebrating and the Order mourning before the morning light, before everything had quite been processed. I mean, this is even before Sirius and Peter had their showdown in the street. Everything is meant to feel quite fresh.

I'm so pleased that you picked up on the shifting definitions of who's good and who's bad--that was a central theme of the story. I don't know that I envisioned Peter as having love for Lily (definitely not in the way that Snape did), but I agree that the presence of a "good" person can shift people in one direction or another in terms of how they react to that.

Thanks for your lovely review!


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