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Review:Owlpost68 says:
HAHAHAHA. Noooww I understand that comment :)
Now, I did love the chapter, but unfortunately there were quite a few typos and some that are words, just not quite the right ones, like though, and thought etc..

You're definitely getting into more of what her past was like, which is really interesting. I can't understand how you do it, introducing just enough to wonder where the rest of it is. Why her grandmother insisted teaching her, where her parents are, and how Aiden came to be

I thought that Oliver was going to have some part of getting her the job in the bakery, but I'm glad he didn't, that'd be too much for her to accept. Plus, I find it funny that him and his sister have that same personality of doing things on impulse. I loved that connection!

All in all, very nice chapter, and easy edits :)
Great job!!

(P.S can't wait for this weekend when the sequel is up!)

Author's Response: Hi darling! I know I already mentioned this in a comment, but yeah, I think I have this chapter mostly sorted out now :P Thank you for bringing it to my attention!

I'm so excited you liked the similarities between Oliver and his sister!! At first I wondered if I was making her too pushy/impulsive, then figured... hey, she is related to Oliver Wood, haha!

Aww I'm so excited that I've made you curious about her past!!! I want to find a good balance between getting her out there, and not just dropping a ton of information on you. If that makes sense :P

Thank you so much for another awesome review! I'm so excited you enjoyed this chapter, and hopefully i'll finish the next soon!!



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