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Review:AlexFan says:
I love how Ellie doesn't even blink at the fact that there are three almost naked males sitting in her kitchen. I would also like to thank you for not going into detail about how wonderful the boys' chests were. It's something that happens all the time and it gets old fast. I liked that Ellie had a normal reaction to this and just made herself some coffee.

And I would like to say that Albus is incorrect, swearing is not a sign of a small vocabulary (I swear like a sailor but my vocabulary is full of words that people don't understand). Swearing is actually a sign that someone is a loyal and upfront type of person.

While that immediately went through my mind, the next part that followed:

"Go fornicate with thyself, heathen."

Almost made me spit out my cream pie all over my computer screen.

Can you imagine having someone ask you, "oh, what colour are your eyes?" and then replying with, "Oh you know, mead coloured."

I loved the rest of the chapter though I think the scene switches are a little bit abrupt. I think you might be able to make the transition a lot smoother and more noticeable.

Other than that though the chapter was really interesting and your writing has gotten loads better as well. I can definitely see the improvement.

I can't stop squealing though because I'm just so excited that there's finally a new chapter! I can't wait until Regulus comes back, I'm beginning to really love that ghost.

Author's Response: I was really worried about posting this chapter. It's been so long and I wasn't sure how well it would sit with the other two chapters.

I very consciously made the decision not to describe their chests, because I don't think that's something Ellie would do, especially if it's what they always do. And Ellie is a little more blase about things than your average person!

I would also like to correct Albus on his incredibly incorrect assumption about swearing and vocabulary size, but I kind of did with that line below. It's quite possibly my favourite line in the entire chapter.

My eyes, thankfully, cannot be described by an alcoholic beverage, so I'll never really know what it feels like, although I imagine it would be a strange experience.

Thanks for pointing that out about the scene switches - I'll definitely work on them!

And yes - Regulus! Eek! I'm so excited!


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