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Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
Hello! It's Voldy Needs a Hug here with your (very late) review.

Before I even began reading, I was immediately drawn in by your summary. It conveyed both the originality and dark mood of your story. It was evidently effective in capturing readers' attentions and convincing them to begin reading.

One of the initial aspects of this chapter that stood out to me was your descriptions. They were flawless, incorporating just enough information without boring readers. They establish a tone of fear among readers, warning of something detrimental to come. Your first paragraph alone was enough to set the scene for the rest of the chapter, and, potentially, your entire story.

I can't easily comment on the characterization within this chapter. It was on the shorter side and didn't provide much information about the main character.

Your plot seems to be developing quickly, however, and you appear to have left us at a cliff hanger. Your creative, rapidly-moving plot is commendable, as I have yet to read a fanfiction similar to this one. Your flow is also flawless. You transition very smoothly between dialogue and descriptions, making this chapter a very easy read.

Your last sentence was, by far, my favorite sentence from this entire chapter. It foreshadows something bad that is to come and creates a sense of foreboding, urging readers to continue on to the next chapter. As soon as I find the time to do so, I will continue reading, regardless of whether or not your rerequest.

Excellent job!

Author's Response: Hello there! :) I'm so glad you liked the summary, since those are so important to drawing the reader in. I wasn't sure if it was too long and clunky or not, so getting positive feedback is very helpful.

I'm pleased you enjoyed the descriptions, and that they were simple enough to be suspenseful but detailed enough to give enough information about the action and past. I agree, the first chapter and paragraph within it does set up the whole story, and I'm so glad to hear you found it effective.

Haha, this cliff-hanger goes on for pretty much the whole story! :P I'm glad you liked the flow of the story, and that it was simple and clear to read. I kind of look back on these early chapters and cringe a little, but knowing you enjoyed it and the writing style is very reassuring. :)

I quite enjoyed the last sentence as well, and I'm so pleased to know it was effective and seemed to say something more about the entire story and what is to come.

Thank you for taking the time to leave a thoughtful review, I really appreciate it and receiving your thoughts was such a pleasure! :)


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