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Review:CambAngst says:
Hi, Sarah!

That was intense. I don't think I ever would have found a way to squeeze nearly 1,000 words out of a single moment, but this was also no ordinary moment. You did incredible justice to what I've always thought of as one of the defining events of the entire series. Molly and Bellatrix were both strong female characters who defined the opposite ends of a spectrum between the nurturing mother figure and the poisonous black widow. When Molly killed Bellatrix, to me it was another reminder of JKR's message about the power of a mother's love for a child and how it can triumph over even the most powerful evil.

I loved the way you worked in the physiological details of a beating heart. It was such a sharp contrast with the premonitions Molly is having about the possible ways that the moment will end. It also served as a brilliant timer of events.

Molly's grief for her lost son combined with her love for her husband and children -- biological and "adopted" -- were powerful emotions and you portrayed them beautifully. I've always been in awe of the way that you use language to express your characters' feelings and the little details that you pluck out to ground these very conceptual moments in reality. Beautiful stuff!

I can't really recommend anything in the way of improving this story. It was amazing from start to finish. Fantastic job!

Author's Response: Hi Dan! Thank you so much for stopping by to read this little brain splurge of mine. I had no idea if it would make sense to readers, or if they would feel the mood I was hoping to create, so it's brilliant to hear that you found it really intense! Haha.

This is perhaps my favourite moment in the whole series. The moment where Molly shows just what love can do, and is willing to throw herself in front of her children and perform magic like she's never done before... Well, it's like Harry's life comes full circle. His mother made the first sacrifice and saved him, losing her life, but giving him the protection he needed. Then, at the height of battle, his adopted mother (because let's face it, she is), is willing to sacrifice herself for the children she has and those she has lost - and wins. Harry is the boy who lived, this time with a mother who lives. That's not to take away from Lily in the slightest... But just to see that circle of maternal sacrifice close in such a beautiful way, woman versus woman, hate versus love. Sigh. I love Rowling. Here ends the diatribe.

Anyway! Yes, details! I find it's all in the details for me. And as you point out, this is an incredibly short amount of time and so it just *has* to come from the little details, as there's little space for a sweeping narrative.

Also, it is SO good to see that you understood what was going on with the visions Molly has. Jami will attest that it was not clear in the first draft! Haha.

Thank you so much again :)

Sarah xo

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