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Review:Voldy Needs a Hug says:
It's Voldy Needs a Hug here with your (very late) review.

Coming from a creativity standpoint, this story is certainly original. You've certainly deviated from many of the cliches here on the archives, which helps to keep readers' attentions.

I have to admit, the Lethifold gave me goosebumps while I was reading. It seems like a rather gruesome creature. However, I would have liked to read more information about the Lethifold, having no previous background information on the creature. It also would have been helpful if a more detailed description was provided of Ginny's affliction and eventual cure. That portion of the chapter was a bit vague.

Your characterization was good, although a few of the characters seemed a bit flat, especially Ron, Harry, and Luna. Despite appearances from all three characters in the Harry Potter series, it is still necessary to gradually introduce their traits and personality quirks. This allows readers to connect with these characters. Perhaps these characters will continue to develop in later chapters.

You certainly left readers in suspense, choosing to keep Titus' father a secret. You did an excellent job of hinting that his father was a Weasley without revealing his true identity.

In your request, you mentioned that you were concerned about foreshadowing. It's a bit challenging to comment on that at the moment because this chapter was on the shorter side. Additionally, having not read the upcoming chapters, I cannot identify sentences that hint of the events to come.

Overall, I enjoyed this chapter and hope to continue reading at some point. Wonderful job!

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