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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey! Here for your requested review from the forums.

This is certainly a very interesting story. Your plot seems original so far and the prologue has set the scene quite well. Coraline seems like an intriguing character. The dream was quite vivid and nicely described. You have done a good job to start your story with this as it absorbs the reader's attention and asks them to read further, which is good.

I don't have much CC for you except for the grammar of course. It's not too bad here but there're some small mistakes. For instance, there is one place where you've written "dark hooded finger" instead of "dark hooded figure" which sounds really funny btw xP So, I'd suggest giving this a thorough re-read whenever you get the time and fix the errors to make it a smoother read, or get a beta.

Apart from that, I can't comment much on the believability yet since it's just the first chapter, but indeed, what you've presented so far seems realistic as such instances like those of Coraline's mother and the man do happen. Your writing style is also good, and has its own originality which is nice. I would suggest adding in a bit more description about the scene and even about Coraline herself to make this a more comprehensible and enjoyable read.

Nonetheless, this was a good start. You have loads of room for improvement. Feel free to re-request.

8/10
Cheers
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review especially for correcting that part, I don't know how I over looked that, I will most certainly re-request!

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