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Review:nott theodore says:
I'm on a roll, Jami!!

Ha! I knew it! I knew it! Sneaky Alrek, sneaking around and spying on these lovely characters for Voldemort! I'm so pleased that my predictions for this are actually coming true, because believe me, that never happens. I'm giving myself a congratulatory pat on the back for this! ;)

In a strange way I really love the Death Eater scenes. They add so much depth to the story and let us see what else is happening but I kind of don't want to know what they're planning because it makes me all worried about our lovely Marauders! I'm so fascinated with your portrayal of Bellatrix; before I'd even started this story I'd heard things about her but I'm convinced that you have the best grasp on her character out of all the writers I've found on this site. It scares me a little, but I love reading about her so much!

Regulus was actually just as fascinating in this chapter, and I'm really pleased that we got a chance to see him again. His character interests me a lot; he was thrust into the Death Eaters at such a young age and seemed to have little choice in the matter, yet he still found the strength and had the intelligence to defy Voldemort and steal the Horcrux. Okay, that went off on a tangent a bit, but what I'm trying to say is that I really liked seeing Regulus here. He felt very young here, and that vulnerability was evident, and it helps to remind the reader how young all of these characters are. I thought it was really touching that he doesn't actually want to hurt Sirius - it contrasts really well with Bella, who doesn't care about anything but her precious Dark Lord.

Oh goodness, when Bella killed the rat! Is that some sort of poetic justice for what happened with Peter in the Shrieking Shack years later? It really highlighted how powerful Bella's magic is; of course she would be able to kill silently!

Alrek... ugh, he's just creepy! If the rumour that Regulus has heard is true then I'm really intrigued about his past, and how Voldemort knew to recruit him. The reasons for trying to recruit James seem completely plausible; if the Order are targeting young witches and wizards then there's no doubt that the Death Eaters would be too. But I can't help but worry about what this is going to mean for the Marauders and the girls...

There were a lot of revelations in this chapter - the title was perfect! I really enjoyed seeing Belle put off telling her story as much as she could (I may have done similar things in the past...) and the fact that we got some more explanation about Lily's feelings for James and yet it didn't seem like a filler at all. Her reasons really made sense to me and I love the closeness of the relationships here - I just want to give them all a hug!

Oh my goodness, Belle! I had tears in my eyes when she was telling the girls her story. I was right about that as well but I almost wish I hadn't been, because her story was so sad! I liked the fact that you actually made her tale realistic; it's so easy to romanticise teenage pregnancy and in all those situations I've witnessed it's never turned out perfectly happily. You didn't do that with Belle's story though and I'm really happy about that!

One of the things I loved about this section was the way you worked the narrative. It was different to Sirius' confession earlier on in the story which was told entirely in flashback. I enjoyed the fact that Belle's speech was included and it highlighted the fact that she is still alone (except for her friends, obviously!) in this country. Then as she made her way through the story it was gradually told more through the narrative; it showed that she was becoming more absorbed in her own story and as she did that so did I.

The story itself was just heartbreaking. You handled a really difficult topic very sensitively, and even though it was hard to read about I did enjoy finding out about it. The situation that she found herself in with Christophe was realistic - the infatuation and the fact that they'd known each other for so long. I couldn't imagine him being happy with the news as so many stories suggest, but what he did was truly horrible.

On top of what happened at Beauxbatons, her family were so horrible to her! I can't believe it but at the same time I can, since so many of the pureblood families seem to have considered honour and duty to the family name the most important thing, especially more important than the welfare of their children. I think I've softened a little towards her sister, knowing that she at least allowed her to stay with her, but I'm pleased that she managed to get away from her parents. She's like Sirius in so many ways - although she didn't find the support network he had when she left her family - and the two are just perfect for each other.

The miscarriage made me cry... it was just told in such a moving way, and I think it does fit with the story and Belle's character. I love the fact that we now know about her past and I feel so much closer to her. I hope that she does tell Sirius, and although I'm not sure how well he'll react at first, I think he will be able to accept it. The girls were so understanding of her and that was so consistent with the types of people that Lily and Alice are, and it was fantastic to see. I'm glad that she's finally found people who can be her family!

And to end this review on a slightly happier note, I loved the image of Lily and James being parents to the kitten!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Now I'm on a roll! I will have all your amazing reviews responded to! I'm sitting in the sun at my grandparents house right now drinking my coffee, and getting to respond to these has just made my morning as perfect as it can get ♥

I don't even know how to respond to your compliments on Bellatrix! She's one of those characters that I do feel like I have a pretty good hold on, and that doesn't happen often. Usually any character that isn't in my Marauders world is very difficult for me to try and get the hang of. I've probably given you my spiel of where I put Bellatrix's mentality, but if not, PM me and I'll gush on about it :P!

Regulus is still scary for me to put in a scene all on his own, but I think I'm getting a bit better at him. i think I have the urge to make him *too* young/too unsure, because he was so young! I think, besides Draco, he must be one of the youngest death eaters to be marked. I can't imagine what that would do to a 16/17 year old. But then I have to remember too that, even if he did good things, he couldn't have been really that good of a person.

Okay, sorry, now I've gone off on a tangent, haha!

I'm so, so excited that you liked Belle's story! And I totally agree. I've seen plenty of girls get pregnant way too young, and none of those have ever ended up in a happy/fairytale/parents get over it and boys turn into men and make great fathers/type of thing. Then when you take into account someone as wealthy and a family as proud as Christophe's, having him anything but angered by the inconvenience would have made no sense to me.

I love what you said about her and Sirius being alike! That's one thing I really wanted. I think Sirius could have fallen in love with someone 'pure' and 'innocent' but i don't think they'd ever really understand Sirius or be able to offer him the same sort of emotional compatibility that someone would who's been through a similar past, and someone who understands that blood isn't strong enough when family honor is at stake. It doesn't matter if you're the child of someone like the Leclairs or Blacks. You either conform to them, or you're no long a bleep on their radar.

Thank you SO MUCH for making me feel so excited, Sian! Your reviews mean so much to me, and I just can't believe how lucky I am to have such an awesome reader ♥



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