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Review:academica says:
Hi there, here from Review Tag :)

Wow, this was a really great one-shot! I loved how you kept the person Luna was painting a mystery until the end; at first I thought it was Rolf, and then maybe Neville, but I never suspected Colin. I also loved how you wove in the theme of counting up to a thousand words with each step. Your imagery was the best part of this, though. Something about the way you described the process was so tangible, almost as if you were actually painting a picture while writing this.

I guess the only thing I'm confused about is the lack of care with which she treated the diagrams and maps that belonged to her father. It was like she was angry with him, and that surprised me. Maybe go back and add some context for that?

Nice work! :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hello!

Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you got confused as to who she was painting, that was generally my plan so I'm glad it worked :D And yay! Your comment on the imagery really made me smile, as I was told I needed to work on this, glad to see the work paid off!

The reasons he treated the diagrams as such, was because they didn't matter to her anymore, really the only thing that mattered was Colin, it really didn't have anything to do with her father as such, it was just that they were the particular item in the way, so she moved them. Had it been anything else she would've treated it in the same way! Though maybe you're right and I need to explain this better!

Thank you again!


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