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Review:nott theodore says:
Hi again, lovely!

Where to start with this review?! KITTEN! I'm going to come back to that later but goodness, the feels!!

I really enjoyed the slow and steady start to this chapter. Last chapter ended in a bit of a cliffhanger and yet you made us wait even longer to find out what actually goes on in Hogsmeade when Alrek joins them! Luckily I've decided to forgive you for it! ♥

The beginning of this chapter was just so James. It's the sort of thing that you hope your captain would never do, but if your captain is James Potter then of course he'll wake you up early in the morning so you can get an edge over the Slytherin quidditch team! Sending a howler up to the girls' dormitories is a stroke of genius - there are far too many stories where the boys can conveniently find their way into the girls' rooms. I love the fact that even the characters who are only on the very edges of this story - people like Margaret and Polly - have their own personalities and realistic reactions to James waking them up at that time. Polly is so adorable! When she admitted that she was already waiting in the common room I just wanted to give her a hug. Please tell me that you don't do anything to hurt her in this story! I also like the fact that you include so much detail in this. It would be easy to forget about things like the Heads' duties, but seeing Lily work on the Hogsmeade forms here really helps to make the setting believable.

Oh, the excuses made me laugh so much! The way that the girls were all trying to come up with something different and the boys kept foiling their attempts to get away - then Belle (and of course it was Belle to say it!) mentions tampons and the boys all run off scared!

Ah, Belle! I loved her in this chapter and I'm really excited about the fact that we're getting to know more about her. And I'm really excited for her getting together with Sirius - I'm pretty sure that's going to happen. If it doesn't I'll be sad, Jami! But one of the things I love is that your characters are so real! They actually have believable insecurities and things that have happened to them and affected them which make them reluctant to jump straight into a relationship.

Aw, I had tears in my eyes when Lily came across her mum's cardigan. The way you're writing the grief process is so realistic, and it's great to find someone that manages to do it justice. Things do get easier over time, and the time comes when things which used to make people sad will make them smile instead.

Belle's pretty sassy as well, isn't she? I can see why she fits so well into Gryffindor - she's so loyal and protective of her friends. Her comments about trying to spice up History of Magic really made me laugh! I really love the way that you write the friendship of the group - it's one of my favourite things about this story. And you made Peter good at something! Thank you Jami! It made me smile to see that he is clearly someone that other people go to for advice on certain subjects - in so many stories he's portrayed as stupid and useless. He might not have been as intelligent as James and Sirius and even Remus, but he still managed to become an Animagus as an underage wizard. Just thank you!

And oh, I'm getting more Lily and James feels in this chapter! When he leaned over to her and whispered that she was beautiful without making a big show of it - they're getting closer and he's so sweet and now I'm running out of proper words to talk about it!

Grr, Alrek. I still don't like him. At all. But more about that later...

So much cuteness in this chapter! I really enjoyed the conversation about pets and Frank having the toad that I'm assuming will be named Trevor and passed down to Neville. And Belle prefers dogs! Her and Sirius are made for each other!

Abigail's another character I don't really like all that much. I can't believe she was so mean to her cousin and just yelled at her for everyone to know that Alana is pregnant. Of course Lily would step in to sort the problem out. I'm fairly sure I've got a good idea what happened with Belle, since she disappeared when the confrontation was taking place. I know I'll find out in the next chapter, but I'm guessing that Belle got pregnant while she was at Beauxbatons and her parents didn't agree with it?

Alrek going on a date in Madam Puddifoot's? No, I don't think so. I think he's doing some sneaky snake-like business and providing them with some excuse that isn't that good but they'll probably believe. But I don't want them to believe his excuses because if he is the spy then he's going to be able to do his Death Eater-y activities without them realising and then that's going to put them all in danger!

Aw, the kitten is so cute! It's so adorable that James pays so much attention to Lily and then bought her the kitten to try and cheer her up! I just have a little Brit-pick with the name of the shop, since Critters is very American - maybe creatures would work better? But anyway, the whole idea was lovely! Is that the cat that Lily mentions in her letter to Sirius in the seventh book?

So many feels in this chapter, Jami! I can't wait to read on and find out what's going to happen next!

Sian :)

Author's Response: I'm accidentally responding to your reviews out of order! Oy Vey!

I get so annoyed when the boys can somehow find their way into the girls' dorm. I mean, after how many years this school has been running for, you'd have to think they'd have outsmarted any students that think they can sneak themselves into the girls' dorm. I do have fun trying to find sneaky ways to twist the rules, like sending Howlers in :P I'm so happy you like that!

Nothing bad happens to Polly in this story! I promise!!! She'll even pop up in the next, too! Come on, Sian, I'm not totally heartless :P!

Yay, I'm so happy you liked Lily's head girl-ness and it didn't jst bore you! I'm so worried half the things I think are fun to include just put others to sleep, haha!

Hahaha, as soon as a girl mentions anything to do with feminine issues, it's bound to scare the men away! You'd have to assume the same thing is true for wizards :P

Well, I think you already have a good idea where Sirius and Belle headed, hehe. And you have no idea what a huge compliment it is that the characters feel real to you. I think characterization and relationships (both friendships and romances) really became my focus with this story because they're both thing I want to keep improving on, so it means so much to me that these people feel real to you ♥.

AND YES! This is the cat that Lily mentions in her letter to Sirius :D! Thank you for the brit pick!! I'm going to go change it... I never thought about 'critters' being a very american word, haha! I swear, you should probably just come stay with me for a month so I soak up all your British words!

THANK YOU SO MUCH SIAN for all your amazing reviews! I can't even explain how excited I get when I know you're getting close to a chapter i really like, and how much it makes me happy to know you're enjoying this! thank you again, lovely ♥




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