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Review:Debra20 says:
Omg, Omg, Omg, an action packed chapter!!! I was beyond myself with excitement while reading this chapter :D I literally had my eyes glued to the screen and couldn't tear them away because I wanted to know what happened next and was afraid not to miss anything haha. Talk about gripping my usually divided attention :D

As I read more and more chapters of this delightful story, I find myself deepening into a frightening position: falling in love with Draco. I can't stress enough how much depth you're giving him. I LOVE, with all my heart deeply flawed characters (no wonder Snape is my favourite character eh?) and Draco is no exception. Only, throughout the HP books we never got the chance to explore his character outside of Harry's perspective and a psychologist, I should know that what reality is for someone, can be completely different for another person. No two stories about the same event are ever the same. The weight of this realisation really hit me this chapter when Draco called Hermione a Mudblood after she'd helped him. His reaction after the words escaped his mouth made me wonder whether in the past, he ever felt sorry for what he'd done (not before HBP however, because it's obvious he needed to go through the ordeal of everything that happened at Malfoy Manor to be able to start his change process).

I'm really savouring this story because it finally gives Draco the depth and layers he's always deserved (again, after the HBP because before that he was just a spoiled kid :P). I find myself picking apart his behaviour and lingering on certain paragraphs that to me show a lot of his inner essence (for example, how he instantly changes when realises that Astoria is in danger). You are making a remarkable job with Draco! Truly, truly impressed!

Also, Astoria is catching my attention more and more. I found another reason for loving her this chapter: the way she holds back judgement. I think this is one of the greatest qualities a human being could have because thanks to it you are not clouded by what others tell you, or sometimes even what you see. You prefer to wait and find out by yourself. Being non-judgemental goes a LONG way in avoiding conflicts. So yes, if you were wondering, my affections for Astoria are growing rapidly :D

I think this is one of those chapters I will have to come back to in terms of learning how to write action scenes, because it was amazing! The pace, the descriptions were really gripping. I completely lost track of everything that was going on around me and was staring avidly at the screen, drinking the words. Draco's confrontation with Ron was especially well handled. I could totally understand Ron for being so jumpy when Draco mentioned something that could have meant a jape towards his family, but at the same time I felt like slapping him because he didn't mean that!

Seriously Dan! I can never find any CC to give you. My reviews are pure gush haha

Author's Response: I guess I have to respond to this beautiful review and see it disappear from my unanswered reviews page, don't I? Such sweet sorrow.

I'm glad that the chapter captured your imagination. This was definitely one of the most fun chapters of Detox to write because of all the action. Even more than that, though, I am pleased as can be that you feel like I'm capturing Draco with his flaws intact. Because he isn't perfect. He isn't even trying to be. He still holds a lot of the same prejudices that he did before the war, he's just learned that they're not worth fighting and dying over. I'm not sure whether or not I think he was ever sorry for the way that he treated Hermione in the past, but he's definitely sorry for it here, even before she curses him. I've tried to give him as much depth and complexity as he deserves, because he is a very interesting character. Much more on this topic to come...

Astoria has so many things in common with Draco as far as their upbringing, yet they're very different people. Astoria is quiet, reserved and very patient in forming her opinions of people and situations. Draco is loud, opinionated and very quick to judge based on first impressions. It will make for some very interesting interactions later on.

Wow. I don't think I've had higher praise than that recently. I like writing fight scenes, but I'm not sure that I'm ready for the idea that someone thinks of them as something to study. :)

Thanks so much for all of the kind words and thoughts. Reviews like this really help me keep going when the writing gets tough!

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