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Review:Trundlebug says:
This story needed some review love. I was about to post when I saw that Academica already had. Oh well, I'll write it anyway.

This is an interesting take on Victoire, and I gotta say that I can see a lot of fun in using her this way. My novel is going to include her and Teddy, so I may have steal some attitude from you.

It's well-written and the style is unique. My only problem with it is that it feels like the start of something bigger and you don't have anymore. What's good for you here is that you've got a good start if you want to pursue this, or if you just leave it alone the closing makes it stand up pretty well as a one-shot. I like it either way.

Grammer seems fine, but I'm not a hall monitor about those sort of things (I'd rather read a flawed and awesome story than a dull piece of perfection any day) and the characterization of Victoire is splendidly mean (I've a cousin just like her). It's interesting, it's fresh and it got the job done.

I really hope you decide to continue with it, or use this Victoire in a future story.

Good read

Ken

Author's Response: Google Chrome was acting up on me before so I'm writing this again.

I'm having a lot of fun writing her this way as well. And you may use as much attitude as you need for your Victoire.

I do plan to pursue this and though I don't have much planned for the next chapter, I'm positive that inspiration will strike at some point and I'll get something out.

I'm happy to hear that my grammar is fine, I often have trouble with it because I miss things so this is good news.

I am indeed going to continue this and I will most likely use this version of Victoire in future stories, she's too much fun to give up.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!


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