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Review:academica says:
Hello, here for the Ravenclaw Review Battle :)

Hah, what an interesting start to the story! I'm really impressed with how you were able to keep the pace slow in this chapter while still making sure it was action-packed and drew the reader in, making them want to read on. I remember reading another first chapter of yours a while back, A Minor Setback I think, and feeling like the pace was too quick. So I can see that you've been working on it and taking reviewers' comments to heart, which is always a good skill to acquire.

I like your main character so far; I feel so bad for her having such a terrible first day of fifth year! I wonder if Albus is going to get any better as the year goes on, and I'm a bit curious how he got this far with such careless spell work and so much difficulty in potions! At least he's nice to Lucinda.

Good start. Maybe I can swing by later on when you've added the next chapter for another review :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey there again!

I was worried that I'd rushed through everything because I didn't go into too much detail about the lessons. I'm delighted to hear that I don't have much to worry about.

Albus will definitely get better as the year goes on, he would have to otherwise he won't get very far in terms of grades. The spellwork bit I imagined to be difficult because you'd have to be precise in what you were pointing at because if you're not you might end up hitting something or someone else.

I hope you do swing by when I post another chapter, your feedback is always very helpful.


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