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Review:MC_HK says:
This story has a very interesting plot. Seeing as I have never read a story about Harry having a twin before, it's pretty new to me and original.

Okay, to address your concerns. I do find some disruption in the flow of the chapter due to punctuation issues. I think you've got some areas that are in need of commas, as this has a lot of run on sentences. Breaking those up with commas would alleviate some confusion and make the flow better. I also think there are times where you should break up the paragraphs a little more as well, just to make it easier on the eyes.

I do think that because so much happened in the chapter and that it is so short, it felt a little bit rushed. I think there are some details you could add, such as a little bit more description, or even lengthening the dialogue between characters a little bit more.

Other than that, I find this interesting! Feel free to re-request MC_HK

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I will take what you said into consideration and try to incorporate into the chapter. As for the punctuation and grammar I'm currently on the market for a beta on the forums and hopefully I will find someone who can help me with the disgrace known as my punctuation and there lack of. Thanks again!

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