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Review:academica says:
Hello, I'm here with your requested review :)

I definitely think you nailed the topic of family here, and on several different levels, too! You've got the obvious theme of Fabian and Gideon being brothers, just perfectly in sync throughout the whole story. On top of that is the theme of them reflecting on Molly and the other people in the Weasley family, even those to come in the future. You did a great job keeping that prominent here.

I did struggle with believability here in one aspect, which is the way the brothers entered the fight. It seems kind of reckless for them just to jump in with taunts flying, even if they felt like they were good enough to take on all of those Death Eaters. If you know you have people depending on you to keep them safe, wouldn't you try to keep yourself safe and play it smart while out on the battlefield? Otherwise, though, the humor they traded along with their blows and the clear contempt with which they treated the Death Eaters seems to fit. I definitely got Fred and George vibes from their characterization, so don't feel limited to that if you'd prefer to try to make them their own men. If that's what you were going for, though, I think you did a nice job of incorporating all of those details.

Flow of this story was pretty good--it was quick, but I liked how there was a little break in the middle for the boys to think while the Death Eaters caught their second wind. I'd always pictured the brothers fighting as they were being taken down rather than being the instigators, but your version does seem to support the legacy they left behind. I did pick out a few typos and technical errors that a beta could help you out with, but nothing major.

Great work! Hope this review is helpful :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hey Amanda!

Oh I'm glad I got the theme of family well in there ;) I wasn't sure obviously because at times I didn't know whether or not it was becoming too redundant and corny.

I understand that it is weird that they readily jumped in to the duel, and I will definitely go back and make it seem more coherent and relevant to the text.

I like to include humour whenever I can so I'm glad you liked the side jokes I weaved into the piece. I was definitely trying to use Fred and George as the basis of their characterization, without them being too much like them. I'm glad you found that well written as well!!

Thank you for this review, I'm so happy you did this for me!

Nadia


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