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Review:rozen_maiden says:
blackballet! It's Mahalia, from the forums. I'm sorry it's taken me so long to keep reviewing (very, very sorry, I should say).
Your story is still coming along really well. I'm loving Dorcas personality - she's sassy, and a little rough around the edges, which makes her incredibly real to read. I really hope her and Sirius work out what's going on - you can tell that it annoys the other Marauders too, so I think it would be awesome if they could just sort their issues out, haha.
But the truth and dare game! I loved it - typical Sirius getting his hands on Veritaserum! That was always going to be trouble. But, I think you wrote that scene really well (there were some grammatical errors, but I won't waste your time pointing them out - if you just gave your chapter a once over, I think it would all be fine :)). It was easy to read, and I loved the character dynamics - especially the Remus/Mary kiss. I thought that was pretty cute :3
Ah, and your flashback! It sounds like Nick and Dorcas were really close at one point. I have to say, she is handling the whole him dating her friend very well, considering how serious (Sirius? haha) they were in their relationship. As much as I shouldn't, I do really enjoy Nick as a character - I think you've given him a strong personality, and he has a real 'bad boy' attitude. The fact I like and hate him at the same time is mark of great writing, so well done :)

Overall, another good chapter. I will be reading more, and again, I'm so sorry I've delayed it for so long!
- Mahalia

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it so much. They will sort there issues out soon, don't worry.
Yes, I had to put it in there, because I feel like it's a staple in a marauder fic. I had a bit of trouble keeping track of everyone, but I finally got it.

Yes they were very close, and I think Dorcas was okay about it because she doesn't really want much to do with Nick anymore, as you'll see in the next chapter.

Nick is like that bad boy that you really want to hate, but you just can't, and I am so glad I wrote him that way.

Thanks so much for reviewing, and I'll definitely request soon!


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