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Review:Haronione says:
Hi blackballet, haronione back for another review :)

I liked the approach you used to introduce the characters and give the readers a vague idea of each characters role in the story. I've not seen this used before.

I liked the way the story starts from Dumbledore inviting them into the order and am interested to see the characters and plot develop from here. This second section of the chapter needs reformatting though as there are no gaps between paragraphs or dialogue which I found made it quite hard to read. I like the idea of Dumbledore calling them all to his office to invite them to the order before they leave Hogwarts. However, at the end of the meeting he asks them 'Please, take into account everything you have learned here' but it seems that they actually didn't learn anything new in the meeting. I just feel that the meeting could have been a bit longer and more information imparted.

That being said this was a great start and I look forward to reading more :)

Haronione ♥

Author's Response: Thank you! I know this chapter is a bit of a mess right now, which I'm so annoyed with myself at. I'm glad you found the beginning interesting at least.

There I meant all the things they've learned at Hogwarts, not in that specific meeting. I can see where the confusion comes in, so I'll fix that as well.

Thank you for your lovely review!


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