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Review:navyfail says:
Hi! I am here from the Ravenclaw Review Battle.

You do have a main cast of eight characters it seems like. I do like that you introduced all of them already but I feel like I don't know any of them. Maybe adding in more about them and characterization in the next chapter will add on to their personalities? At some places of the story things get a little confusing since you didn't address most of them by their names.

"The redhead and the dark haired bespectacled one clasped hands nervously, as did the longer haired boy, and the blonde Gryffindor." Here I can tell the first two are Lily and James but the other two I am not sure. The long-haired one is probably Sirius but there was no clue on who the blonde Gryffindor was.

Though I have to give it to you, you set up the mood nicely. I can feel the tension and worry in the air. How all of them act toward each other is great. You can see that most of them have some kind of understanding.

All in all, congrats on starting another story.
Clearly this story has a lot of potential.
Great job.

Author's Response: I do! It is a big cast to work with, but I think I'll be able to do it. All of that will be set up in the next chapter, and you will see who's who. I work a lot anonymity for some reason.

I'm glad you think this will be able to go somewhere, and see potential.

Thanks for your review!

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