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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi Shelby!

I really loved how you painted their relationship at the beginning of this chapter. That wistful, hopeful air of a beginning of a relationship is so familiar to all of us and you really captured the varying emotions Eileen must have been feeling.

The scene with Lorraine was great, mainly for its normalcy. The sewing parts were really great and reading them was really interesting. The casual chit chat really added to the chapter as it made it real and that sort of dialogue is the type lots of people forget.

Then when Tobias asked out Eileen it was just wonderful. I was taken a little by surprise by how sudden it was, but then again it is a group date so it's less formal. I can just picture Tobias standing there and he's so adorable in my mind.

The development of the curse was really great. It's making me wonder whether its related to the necklace or blood. Then what happened with her hands! I can't wait to find out more!

The date was also really wonderful and it created a great foundation for their relationship. It made me desperate for the next chapter because I can't wait to see how it develops!

♥ Kiana

Author's Response: Hello Kiana! ♥

Thank you! I felt that it was necessary to start off the chapter like that since their relationship is so new. And it's just plain cute!

Oh, you know I love my normalcy in this novel! I want it to be realistic and relateable! That's such a compliment for me - a lot of writers do forget the dialogue that you mentioned, but we all participate in it in some form or another in real life.

I can understand where you're coming from on how sudden it is. But you'll come to find out that Tobias feels this connection to Eileen that is just one of /those/ things, you know? I hope it wasn't too sudden for you! I'm trying to pace things!

Oh yes, the curse! You know how I love my hints and it will just keep getting crazier and crazier!

Haha, you crack me up, Kiana! Desperate for the next chapter, well, if that's the case maybe I'm doing my job by writing a halfway decent story!

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, Kiana! I always love hearing your opinions and value them highly! ♥

Shelby


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