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Review:Mnemosyne_Morrigan says:
First of all, praise heavens for the minors!
Well, maybe Remus or Sirius aren't that minor, but Dorcas, Mary, Marlene, other members of The Order are. And I'm always feeling like there isn't enough stories about them.

Tough to make any hard opinions as it's only the beginning of the story. Those few sentences, each for every member, are mysterious. It seems they reveal something about the part each of them had to play, but it's still enigmatic. Especially Marlene and Dorcas. I assume, or better say I hope, you will dedicate acute attention to everyone.

Sometimes I was lost, trying to understand who's who and who's speaking at the time. There are a few words missing in some of the sentences. e.g. "I'd like to give you each until the end of your schooling here to think about this" - I think you lost "time" somewhere. But I like the careful, cryptic composition of words, so characteristic for Dumbledore.

So I'm waiting for the next chapter ;)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so excited for this story, you have no idea. I love minor characters as well.

There will be like mixing between the years (1978-1981 throughout the whole novel) in every chapter, so I think that's what will make this more interesting. I will definitely give everyone equal attention, because I think everyone has had and will have their own stories within the large one.

It's my first time not writing in first person, so I've had a little trouble with the speaking. I think I'm just going to have to first two chapters in third POV and then switch it to first for the rest.

I've always loved writing Dumbledore even though it's a struggle. It's just so much fun!

Thanks for your review, and I'll update soon.


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