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Review:UnluckyStar57 says:
Hi! I know that I'm incredibly late with this review, but hopefully I can be of some help to you. :)

So, I really like how you've kept the kind of dark, mysterious feel as the first chapter, but you've told the story more from Draco's point of view. It really gave me some perspective about the Cross family and further aided in developing the (rather standoffish) character of Anaxandra.

I have lots of questions, which is a very good thing! :D

1) What year is this fic set in? I can tell that it's a little after the war, but I'd like to know how much time has passed.

2) In the Missing Persons Report, the family members had the last name of "Cross." Was Anaxandra lying when she told Draco that her surname was "Snyder?" As far as I could tell, their last name is not really established in the prologue--there's too much action to waste lots of time on explanations! However, I would like to know, just for storytelling purposes.

3) Will Harry Potter come into this story at all? If so, what kind of a relationship will he have with Draco?

I only have one suggestion for this chapter, and it's that you give it another scan for tense. Sometimes, you changed from past to present tense, and it interrupted the flow of things a little bit. I personally like your story in past tense, but I recommend that you pick one for the entirety of the story. Unless, of course, you decide to write a different chapter in a different tense entirely, which is absolutely fine. It's your call, really! :)

Other than that little thing, I saw nothing wrong with this chapter. It was very interesting and mysterious, and I can't wait to find out more!

May your pen never run out of ink!

~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: First, thank you for the review! I appreciate it a lot!

The fic is set in 2001. I believe I have that on the case files? I'll have to go back and check though, and I should probably make it later, but I wanted to make it before anyone was popping out babies or anything haha. Actually, if you could PM me your opinion on that, I would like to know :)

Ah! I had actually debated on this, wondering whether she should be lying to him or not, and I decided that its a secret :) But I can tell you the family in the case file was NOT Ana's family, and that it was there solely to add to Draco's changed character.

Yes! Harry makes an appearance later, and actually takes on a rather large role around chapter eight.

Sadly, I have a terrible problem with that. I've been told that by another reviewer already, and I'm afraid all of my chapters have that issue. I keep trying to go back and fix them, but end up missing some and it's just a terrible mess.

Thank you again, and if you're fine with it, I may re-request :)


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