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Review:academica says:
Hey Jami! It's always so nice when we get to swap, so thank you so much for offering, and thank you even more for the beautiful review you left me! I'm so happy you enjoyed the story, and sometime soon I'll stop snuggling your review and respond to it :D

Anyway, on to business!

Now, in my field there is still a lot of debate over whether DID really exists, and I've never had exposure to a person who really seemed to have it. But your portrayal does seem to reflect what I imagine it would look like--someone with clearly different personalities who struggles a lot with which of those personalities is allowed to be in charge. I liked how Victoire struggled more with her alter as she got older, until eventually it seized her tumultuous youth and went running with it. Especially since you said you didn't necessarily intend to write a DID story, very nice work with this.

I have to admit, I have a lot of curiosity about why Victoire has become this way. I was expecting you to talk about some kind of trauma that occurred in her past, beyond the problem of her family's high expectations for her. This girl just seems so different from the one who was perfectly happy with Teddy as of the canon series's epilogue. Given that she was probably one of the first children born after the war ended, I know she would have been under a lot of pressure to really succeed in life.

I love this line in particular--

Maybe he's known all along about the bond you made, the one you refuse to break, with the perfect monster living inside of you.

Oh, and I don't know if this was accidental, intentional, or just my perception, but it seemed like you switched between "you" and "her" when referring to Victoire's alter. Either way, I think it worked out in your favor because it really conveyed the confusion that she must be feeling all the time. It was a cool stylistic touch to add to this piece.

Nice work, as usual :)

-Amanda

Author's Response: Hi Amanda!

I'm so happy you liked this! I started it wanting to write a story about someone who just wasn't okay for no real reason, and then when I was finished and realized it felt a bit split personality ish I went, oh! hahah.

I don't think i really have anything in mind in terms of some sort of past trauma that made her this way. I sort of want her to just be off the deep in for no other reason then the fact that she doesn't want to pull herself back, if that makes sense.

Yes! That was intentional, and I'm so excited it worked! I was wondering if it made it all too confusing.

Thank you so much for an awesome swap! I always love reading your stuff and getting your opinions!

♥ Jami


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