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Review:marauderfan says:
Hi! Here with your requested review from the forums.

Wow- this is such an original story! I've never read any fanfiction quite like this and I'm totally drawn in. I love dystopian fiction and this looks quite dystopian given the beginning when Rose is in Azkaban. That first scene with the person interviewing her - wow! (I'm just being really inarticulate and saying "wow" a lot, but I just love it!) I'd never thought about what would happen if Muggles found out about magic, and I'm really curious to hear all about it. This chapter raises so many questions and I think that's a really good way to start out.

I was curious what happened to Hermione and Ron? And Ginny? Hopefully the history there will be revealed soon - I wondered how Rose ended up alone in that predicament, and where her family was through all of that. Might just be getting ahead of myself though!

I don't like the Head Auror, he's up to nothing good. Since that part was from his POV, I'm not quite sure yet how Rose thinks of him, but I'd be interested to know whether she can see through his act. The house-elves were pretty funny though. And I like that they're being paid, looks like Hermione's work has been successful :)

There was a little shifting of tenses in the italics part when she tries to save Hugo. It starts out in present and then shifts to past, and there was one sentence in both tenses: He's all she had left. The italic passages before it are all present, and the ones after it are in past, so you might want to pick one and stick to it. I think past would work better, personally, since it's a flashback, but obviously pick whichever works best for you! :)

Overall this is a really engaging first chapter and you've got SUCH a great, original idea for a story. I'll be really eager to see how it develops. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Sorry it took me forever to reply, but school started and things got hectic.

I'm glad the chapter piqued your interest and I will to answer all the questions in due time in as shocking a manner as possible :) You don't like the Head Auror? Haha agreed he's definitely not up to something good but I had a blast writing him. Rose is most definitely aware of his malicious intent (he makes it pretty clear haha). Unfortunately she can't do anything about it.

I will look over the italics part and make the edits. You're right. it is confusing. Thanks for pointing that out! You're awesome!

Thanks for reviewing! it means a lot!


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